Countering the copyright industry's propaganda

Question

I have been working on a short piece on piracy. It's going to be distributed on public trackers together with other content...... I'm interested in finding effective ways to undo some of the damage the industry's propaganda has done to society. 

Wondering if I can get some feedback, My writing is not great:

http://fuwanovel.com/Fuwanovel__visual-novels-for-the-world.html

(visual novels are a type of Japanese adventure game. fuwanovel is just a site im in the process of launching). 

 

If you can make any suggestions, that would be greatly appreciated~

btw, I relinquish everything I write to the public domain. no rights reserved plz.

 

Answer 1

Good work, good idea - but I have some feedback:

I am not sure I got the message of your work.  Are you trying to defend piracy, attack copyright or counter the industry's propaganda?  You seem to touch on all of them while concluding neither.  Perhaps a tighter and simpler message would be more effective?

In terms of visual style, I must admit that I am not a fan of visual novels.  I found yours a little difficult to follow.   Fewer fonts and more blank space between paragraphs would certainly help.

Hope this helps a little.

Answer 2

Brief Supporting Renewal of Motion to Proceed as a Pauper on Appeal

I saw just a "cyber-squatted" domain alleging to be for sale but used for absolutely NOTHING.

"Click here to buy Fuwanovel.com for $2,295."

http://theendofpornbywire.org/Complaint.html

 

Answer 3

Hmm, I'm with Adam here. I think you either need to bring it down to a more focussed message or, alternatively, expand on what you have but break it down into a chapter-like structure.

Personally I think it's worth emphasising the world income gap a bit more. A tune may only cost $0.99 on i-tunes but that's still a day's wage in many parts of the globe.